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I would prefer the one about the girl because it sounds more descriptive and eerie. But it’s mostly terrific because it’s about a girl and also I’m a girl myself. I know that to be honest both of them are actullay really good because they fit perfectly together and I like that. Even a little kid would pick one very quickly but it’s just the best thing is that is has more description and more detail in it that it sounds more eerie and the most important thing is that it has vocabulary in and that’s what makes it very interesting.🌲🌲🌲🌲🙇🌲🌲🌲🌲
I prefer the first opening because it has lots of verbs, and adjectives, and it also gives me pictures in my mind so I can sort of see the story in pictures in my head. It gives me feelings like it makes me a bit excited and it makes me wonder about what’s going to happen next. It makes me think the story is going to be very interesting and it will be an adventure. It makes me ask a few questions like, which country is the boy in and how old is he? But I do already know why he is in the cemetery because we talked about it in class.
I prefer the second opening because it allows me to use my imagination. There are more fronted adverbials in the second opening, which I like. This makes it sound more eerie. They both have good adjectives. It would be nicer in a cemetery.
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